Peer Review Feedback

Today in class I had my peer review for my first essay assignment.  I feel really good going in to this assignment after the feedback I received from Carmen and Wanda.  They really liked what I had to say about the topic and how my letter was coming along.  The one thing they said I need to work on is maybe sound a little more like myself when explaining certain things in the opening of my paper.  Later in the paper when I start critical thinking that's when I do sound like myself.  I will however try to tweak the paper a bit and make it sound more human without compromising credibility.